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Old July 3rd, 2011, 06:12 AM
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In the shelter of God

Hi posting my first photo on this site and in the critic section..
Be honest and let know my faults..
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Old July 3rd, 2011, 09:57 AM
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Re: In the shelter of God

It is very difficult to critique someone's photo when that person is from another country and culture. The critic must always be aware their words are clear as well as their meaning. In this medium, it's easy to lose context and be misconstrued.

Having said that, I think this is a good photo, but there are several things that keep it from being a great photo.

I think black and white works with the mood of this photo (though I think color would be good, too). A challenge you have with black and white is that without color, you're left with only luminance to tell your story. Since humans naturally focus first on the brightest area of the scene, you need to be able to lead us to your subject carefully. In this shot, the wall of the church is quite bright, and the woman is darker. As a result, I naturally looked at the wall first, and only after searching did I notice the woman. I think you could help this by cropping much of the church wall. You lose context, though. Make sure you include the cross to help keep that context.

I also think it would work had you lowered yourself a bit so the shot was more straight on. In most cultures, looking downward subconciously conveys a sense of superiority over the subject. Looking straight across make us feel more like equals.

I do like the shot. I like the mood, and your story with it.
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Old July 3rd, 2011, 10:25 PM
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Re: In the shelter of God

I like this picture. The only thing I would add to what has already been said is that perhaps a slightly narrower aperture would have worked better. I like that the background is blurred, but just a little bit more detail would have increased the strength of the environment for me. Nicely done. Looking forward to seeing more.
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Old July 3rd, 2011, 10:58 PM
vatsal_konkani vatsal_konkani is offline
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Re: In the shelter of God

Thank you very much Tim and sqoverton...Appreciate the it.
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Old July 13th, 2011, 11:59 AM
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Re: In the shelter of God

I like the idea, but I think if it were taken using a landscape composition to include the leading line of the pews off on one side it would make for a stronger image. Note because of a person's natural tendency to read through a picture you might then need to flip it horizontally to put the person to the right.
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Old July 13th, 2011, 12:16 PM
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Re: In the shelter of God

I agree with sqoverton about having a bit less depth of field on this shot. The whole scene doesn't need to be 100% in focus, but I would like enough detail to be able to recognize what is in the background.

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